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BlueJ
07-22-2008, 12:41 PM
Name: Hashimoto, Tomohiro "Tomo"
Gender:M
Age: 17
School: N/A
Clubs: N/A

Stats
Stamina:10
Strength:10
Defence:7 (-3)
Speed:13 (+3)
Total Skill pts.:40

A.T. info: Tomo uses a strange pair of AT's, they are white with vertical black stripes, almost like that of a zebra. He spends all of his time and money into upgrading the air comressors at the bottoms, making them better and more effecient. On his wheels is written "TRUE WINGS" the name of the AT team he started in America.

Looks

http://king-of-ide.deviantart.com/art/Tomohiro-Hashimoto-92786583
(Something I made in about an hour, once a better picture is made, i'll upload it)
http://king-of-ide.deviantart.com/art/Tomohiro-Hashimoto-92786583


Hair: brown
Eyes: Grey
Skin tone: light tan
Height:190 cm
Weight: 84 kg
Blood Type: A

Overall looks: Tomo took after his mother's american family and grew very tall and lanky, at first he didn't like his height so he used to huch as a child, now that everyone appreciates his height he stands tall. Ever since he was a small child his father, a general in the American army, put him through a very harsh training regiment with his brother. Therefore he has always had an extremely good physique. However he is not very flexible which more often than not proves to be his downfall. He can often be seen wearing jeans and a white shirt with blue writing "FLY". When he rides AT he puts a red bandanna over his nose and mouth and wears a pair of sport goggles so that he can see when he runs.

Personality

likes
American Football
Track & Field
Video Games
Meat (could almost be considered a carnivore if not for his love of ramen)
the feeling of the wind on his face
shy girls

dislikes
bugs flying in his face
pidgeons
people who refer to themselves in third person

hobbies
singing
drawing
driving with the windows down

fears
being a burden
puppets
injury

goals
to be able to fly higher than any other user of AT

Overall Personality
Upon first impressions Tomo is a quiet individual, but once he opens up a bit more, you cannot get him to shut up. He always obeys the orders of authority figures that he respects, this may come from his upbringing in a military background. He is also extremely loyal to his friends, he always carries a picture in his pocket of his AT team in America TRUE WINGS on which they all signed wishing him good luck in Japan. Tomo also likes to try and help people even if they don't want him do, yet he does not often ask for help himself. He loves the feel of flight, you often won't be able to find him on the ground when he rides so if you're looking for him, look up.

History
Birthplace: America
Birthdate: March 19th 1991
Birthtime: 11:50 AM

Parents: Gen. Shinkei Hashimoto, Iris Smith
Siblings: Lt. Jiyuu Hashimoto, older brother (deceased)

Overall History
Tomo's Father's grandparents were immigrants from Japan, so Tomo has lived in America his entire life. Shinkei quickly rose through the rankings of the army, and fell in love with and married the daughter of another general. Iris' family has a long military history, however, she had decided that she was going to be an artist, and spent her life in a studio. Jiyuu was born in 1987, and Tomo in 1991, due to Tomo being one half Japanese, he learned both Japanese and English and can speak them fluently. 1 year ago, his older brother Jiyuu enlisted in the army, and was shipped overseas, Tomo wanted to join his brother but was told that he was too young to enlist and was crushed. 6 months later, the Hashimoto family recieved a message that Jiyuu had saved an entire squadron by jumping on a live grenade, ending his life, so Jiyuu was given a posthumous medal of honor. Tomo became enfuriated, thinking that if he had been there, that his brother would not have died. Tomo then began to hate the Army, and everything that it stood for. 2 weeks ago, the family moved to Japan on military orders, so Tomo has not been able to enroll in school yet.

Extra

Tattoos: "Vi Veri Veniversum Vivus Vici" is written on his back, when translated it says "By the power of truth I while living have cunquered the universe" a line taken from Faust

"Jiyuu" is written on his left forearm, in memoriam of his deceased brother

How he got into ATs: Since a young age, Tomo has been obsessed with the sky, he often told people that he wanted to be in the airborne brigade divison of the army, his father always drove an old army humvee. Tomo would often stand in the bed and be surrounded by wind. His dream is to be able to fly without the aid of aircraft, thats when he discovered ATs and realized their potential to make people truly fly. Part of the reason that he was so excited to come to Japan was because of the large amount of AT riders.

He is left handed.

Roleplay sample
The alarm rings, Tomo groans, hits it and slides out of bed, he immediatly turn on the TV to the weather channel. The weatherman says that there are going to be high winds in the Tokyo area today. Tomo opens his eyes wide and smiles "time to get to work" he thinks. He takes a quick shower, heats up some cup ramen, puts on his FLY shirt, some jeans, his goggles and red bandanna. As he exits his room he says outloud "time to fly" and jumps out into the morning sunlight.





thats my app. hope you like it

Sunny
07-25-2008, 12:04 PM
Mmm...

I have to say that this application is rather different from the a lot of the ones I've seen. I like it. However... there are a few problems.

The biggest nitpick I have with this application... is the grammar. You used too many commas. Your "sentences" are often many separate and distinct sentences stringed together by multiple commas. For example, you wrote:

Ever since he was a small child his father, a general in the american army, he was put through a very harsh training regiment with his brother, so he has always had an extremely good physique, however he is not very flexible which more often than not proves to be his downfall, he can often be seen wearing jeans and a white shirt with blue writing "FLY", when he rides AT he puts a red bandanna over his nose and mouth and wears a pair of sport goggles so that he can see when he runs

This entire paragraph is one sentence. I can split it into:

"Ever since he was a small child, his father, a general in the American army, he was put him through a very harsh training regiment with his brother,. so Therefore, he has always had an extremely good physique,. However, he is not very flexible, which more often than not proves to be his downfall,. He can often be seen wearing jeans and a white shirt with blue writing "FLY",. When he rides AT, he puts a red bandanna over his nose and mouth and wears a pair of sport goggles so that he can see when he runs."

Length variation in sentences often results in a more interesting and engaging read. ;3 Try it.

I'd like you to go over the application, reread what you've written, and break the paragraphs up into smaller, more readable sentences. (I'm not looking for perfection... just an attempt to improve. ;3)

Other than that...

upon first impressions Tomo is a quiet individual,

Capitalize this please.

Add a couple more lines to the Overall Personality, and you should be good to go. ;3

BlueJ
07-25-2008, 02:14 PM
I edited the scentences and broke them up, I also added a little to his personality. I'm trying to get a picture up I just need to clean it and color it and I should be good, thanks for the help.

BlueJ
07-25-2008, 06:27 PM
I uploaded a picture but it doesnt seem to be working :(

Sunny
07-25-2008, 11:21 PM
http://img382.imageshack.us/img382/3920/approveyw6.png


The picture isn't working because it's not a .jpg file. ;3 It's a webpage you've got there...

Once you have a new image, just PM one of the RPG mods and we'll change it for you.

BlueJ
07-28-2008, 04:27 PM
Stats
Stamina:10
Strength:10
Defence:7 (-3)
Speed:14 (+4)
Total Skill pts.:41