innominated
06-19-2008, 03:38 PM
Hey guys, I really want to give this comic some attention. It's my favorite one that I myself have made, after all...xD ; . It may not have the best art ever, but I try a little, and I'd appreciate ANY critique.
Click this picture for its homepage:
http://seasonalwind.net/seasonalwind/links/banners/bannersw2.gif (http://swfire.smackjeeves.com/)
I'd appreciate it if you could comment on:
The cohesiveness of the plot (does it confuse you or not? I want to hear even little things!)
Umm...okay, any input would be appreciated?
You can comment on the comic itself, or this thread, or pm me. I'll look at any of them =3 !
PAGE EXAMPLE:
http://www.smackjeeves.com/images/uploaded/comics/4f7eb48d9236.jpg
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COMIC INFORMATION
name: Seasonal Wind: Fire
GENRE: FANTASY. BORDERING SCI-FI. SUPERNATURAL.
Main Characters:
Arietheo Firetamer - @16yrs | Male | Rumors say that he's the royal heir, but his role as King of Assassins is pretty questionable, along with his unknown past. He accepts a job offered by Artello Satyr--the strange and uncharacteristic task of guarding his twin sister. However, he seems to have an ulterior motive in mind... {PROTAGONIST, MUCH?}
Asuna I'rfitel - @16yrs | Female | A crafty lady who enjoys manipulating others, Asuna's role as Firetamer's wife and associate raises more than a few eyebrows. She works for anyone if the request pays enough--including such notable figures as Korynn Obotaru.
Korynn Obotaru - Appears 27? | Male | Korynn Obotaru is set on the domination of She'rok. Although it could be said that he's already succeeded, he intends to wipe out the inhabiting races and create a new, superior people to rule it. As such, he's not very loved by everyone, and is definitely the main antagonist.
Artello and Atriyaana Satyr - @16yrs | Male/Female | This set of twins consists of clones made by Ryushiro Darkrise (one of Korynn Obotaru's most powerful servants, and probably the smartest). Artello is much more serious than his playful sister, and has a curse haunting him that makes it dangerous to be around the things he loves. Atriyaana, on the other hand, is quite content to be near her brother, and anyone, for that matter, since she loves company. She'll tell anyone her motives--she wants to change the future, so that the baby she's pregnant with could have a better world. She's glad to have a bodyguard like Firetamer, but rather detests his wife, Asuna.
minor characters:
I'lead LowD'uran - One of the princes during the Golden Age of She'rok. He possesses the ability to see and communicate with the future (presumably) and tries to tell his family about Korynn Obotaru's malevolence.
D'/Rigel LowD'uran - I'll type more when he's played out his role =D ! He's a prince during the Golden Age of She'rok.
D'Turwin LowD'uran - the benevolent King of She'rok during the Gold Age of She'rok.
summary:Long ago, the time of She'rok froze, the royal line died, and the kingdom went into anarchy. It's been two hundred years without rain or sun...the animals are gone...the dreary feeling of death hangs over all.
And then there's the Parliathon...the alliance of the evil-doers.
-time starts now-
ELEMENTS: There's Assassins, Pirates, Royalty, a ring of mafia-type leading criminals called the Parliathon, special abilities (not to be confused with superpowers), et cetera.
setting: Post-post Apocalyptic World. See, people learned to manage after the Revolution. Then, foriegn invaders came in, took their technology, and threw the kingdom of She'rok into chaos. specifics: Broken-down cities; a desert culture; the depths of some sparse woodland; a huge cavern connected to billions of tunnels, underneath the kingdom.
If I need to add anything, tell me, please. ^^ !
Click this picture for its homepage:
http://seasonalwind.net/seasonalwind/links/banners/bannersw2.gif (http://swfire.smackjeeves.com/)
I'd appreciate it if you could comment on:
The cohesiveness of the plot (does it confuse you or not? I want to hear even little things!)
Umm...okay, any input would be appreciated?
You can comment on the comic itself, or this thread, or pm me. I'll look at any of them =3 !
PAGE EXAMPLE:
http://www.smackjeeves.com/images/uploaded/comics/4f7eb48d9236.jpg
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COMIC INFORMATION
name: Seasonal Wind: Fire
GENRE: FANTASY. BORDERING SCI-FI. SUPERNATURAL.
Main Characters:
Arietheo Firetamer - @16yrs | Male | Rumors say that he's the royal heir, but his role as King of Assassins is pretty questionable, along with his unknown past. He accepts a job offered by Artello Satyr--the strange and uncharacteristic task of guarding his twin sister. However, he seems to have an ulterior motive in mind... {PROTAGONIST, MUCH?}
Asuna I'rfitel - @16yrs | Female | A crafty lady who enjoys manipulating others, Asuna's role as Firetamer's wife and associate raises more than a few eyebrows. She works for anyone if the request pays enough--including such notable figures as Korynn Obotaru.
Korynn Obotaru - Appears 27? | Male | Korynn Obotaru is set on the domination of She'rok. Although it could be said that he's already succeeded, he intends to wipe out the inhabiting races and create a new, superior people to rule it. As such, he's not very loved by everyone, and is definitely the main antagonist.
Artello and Atriyaana Satyr - @16yrs | Male/Female | This set of twins consists of clones made by Ryushiro Darkrise (one of Korynn Obotaru's most powerful servants, and probably the smartest). Artello is much more serious than his playful sister, and has a curse haunting him that makes it dangerous to be around the things he loves. Atriyaana, on the other hand, is quite content to be near her brother, and anyone, for that matter, since she loves company. She'll tell anyone her motives--she wants to change the future, so that the baby she's pregnant with could have a better world. She's glad to have a bodyguard like Firetamer, but rather detests his wife, Asuna.
minor characters:
I'lead LowD'uran - One of the princes during the Golden Age of She'rok. He possesses the ability to see and communicate with the future (presumably) and tries to tell his family about Korynn Obotaru's malevolence.
D'/Rigel LowD'uran - I'll type more when he's played out his role =D ! He's a prince during the Golden Age of She'rok.
D'Turwin LowD'uran - the benevolent King of She'rok during the Gold Age of She'rok.
summary:Long ago, the time of She'rok froze, the royal line died, and the kingdom went into anarchy. It's been two hundred years without rain or sun...the animals are gone...the dreary feeling of death hangs over all.
And then there's the Parliathon...the alliance of the evil-doers.
-time starts now-
ELEMENTS: There's Assassins, Pirates, Royalty, a ring of mafia-type leading criminals called the Parliathon, special abilities (not to be confused with superpowers), et cetera.
setting: Post-post Apocalyptic World. See, people learned to manage after the Revolution. Then, foriegn invaders came in, took their technology, and threw the kingdom of She'rok into chaos. specifics: Broken-down cities; a desert culture; the depths of some sparse woodland; a huge cavern connected to billions of tunnels, underneath the kingdom.
If I need to add anything, tell me, please. ^^ !