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osskie
06-17-2008, 03:05 PM
Username: osskie

GENERAL

Name: Oskar "Maximus" Wernersson
Gender: Male
Age: 18
School: Higashi High School
School Clubs:

* Tracking team
* American football team
* Student council

Skill Stats:

* Stamina: 10.
* Strength:15
* Defense: 5
* Speed: 10

Total Skill Points: 40.


Status: F-Class Rider
A-T Information: His A-T's are actual really discreet in their appearance. The whole trek is jetblack (the wheels as well) with the exception of a red chinese dragon on the outer side of each trek and the design is just like a regular rollerblade. Each trek has got a set of 6 wheels and each wheel is quite large. This means the treks are quite long and gives the rider, amazing acceleration and speed but less mobility when turning. So at the cost of mobility, he's got superior speed compared to other treks. The type of wheels(rubber) are also very suited for wall riding and they've got an awesome grip and suspension so the knees won't take a large beating. The inside of the boot is also custom designed for his feet so that the ergonomy will be flawless.

Insted of laces he's got plastic straps so that the boot will fit better against the foot and therefore the treks will respond faster. Oskar is also extremely fond of his treks and therefore he takes really good care of them. The result of that is that they look brand new every time he uses them.


LOOKS

http://data.fuskbugg.se/skalman01/seike.jpg

Eye Colour: Blue
Hair Colour: Blonde and black
Skin Tone: Really tanned and brownish. Like thai's.
Height/Weight: 186 cm (6'10) and 75 kg (165 pounds)
Blood-type: AB
Overall Appearance: Really expensive clothing and a style that came from birth. Looks really fancy and very good-looking. I think the picture speaks of itself but he likes to wear expensive clothes. Maybe because of his profession or just because he thinks they are the coolest. He absolutely loves brands like Evisu, Fred Perry but also swedish brands like Koppartrans and Filippa K which he imports from a company over there.

His hair is blonde, almost white with black stripes. It's really spikey and has some kind of similarity to the J-rock culture. However he should be seen more like a regular kid with a different haircut.

The shoes he likes to wear are expensive sneakers. Brands like adidas, lacoste and roots dominate among the shoes he wears. However since he's now begun to wear A-T's, his other shoes remain unused most of the time.

His eyes are deepblue and if you look into them it's like gazing at the stars. You'll be moved and become completely hypnotized by them. Nothing else in the world will seem important at that time.

His body is wellbuilt and it's easy to see that he's working out regurarly. Actually it's five times a week at the gym and with his tracking/american football clubs it becomes a lot more. Since his father was thai and his mother was swedish he's got a bit darker skintone than most other stormriders.

While riding A-T's he likes to wear really dark slim clothes and a ninjastyle mouthcover.

You'll probably see him with a serious face most of the time but sometimes he lights up with a smile so warm it melts the arctic ice.

PERSONALITY

Likes:

* Sex
* Nightclubs
* Sports
* Music (Post-hardcore, hardcore, metalcore, deathcore e.g. Underoath, Unearth, Raised Fist, Bring Me The Horizon etc.)
* Great food
* To cook
* Beautiful women
* High speeds (Cars/motorcycles.. Anything!)
* Anime

Dislikes:

* Idiots
* Ugly people
* Fat people
* Smelly people
* Bad food
* Spiders and insects

Hobbies:

* Counter-strike
* Music (Plays the acoustic guitar)
* Hooking up with girls

Fears: Unnatural disasters
Goals: Be a great airtrekker. To become wealthy. Become the worlds greatest model. To be able to live and support his brother at all costs, because he's the person Oskar love the most
Overall Personality: Oskar is an arrogant kid but also very kind even though those traits probably won't go hand in hand. He's also very egocentric and knows that he's really popular among girls because of his looks and behaviour. He's also very caring (which can be proved by the love of his 2 yrs younger brother). He's also cares about his appearance a lot. He almost refuses to go out in public if he haven't prepared himself properly and fixed his haircut and so on.

He's hardworking and really loyal to the people close to him. However he's really hard to get to know since he shuts out most of the people trying to get close to him. So the one's that get to know him and get close to him should be considered really special for him.

He's also very smart and has gone through lots of painful memories which can be seen in his eyes, if you have a good insight. Because of all the things he's gone through he's become hardened and knows how tough life can be. He never takes anything for granted but always tries his best until the end.

Some people would also call him reliable since he always finishes what he's started and he never breaks promises (Of his own free will). However he's got a terrible memory. Great but short some would say. And that's why sometimes people will get disappointed since he often forgets very important things. On top of that he's got a "never give up" attitude. Another downside is that he's never satisfied. That's partly why he's never had a real girlfriend. It always ends up with him using them and then dumping them. (Which makes him hate himself sometimes)

He's got some serious talent for sports and is the star of both the tracking team and the american football team as a runnerback. (He got the MVP award last year in Tokyo and was picked in the best 11 as a runnerback)

Also he's a guy that accepts people for who they are, not for what they do or have done. However he despises idiots and ugly people. Bad food can make him rampage. Therefore he spends a lot of money on food and when he's got the time, prepare the food in his own kitchen.

HISTORY

Birthplace: Sweden
Birthdate: 17 January
Birthtime: 13:37
Parents: Both deceased (Secret because of his own will)
Siblings: Younger brother (David), 16 years old.

Overall History:
Was born in Sweden but after the parents died in a terrorist bombing when he was only 6 years old, he was forced to move to Japan with his younger brother since his only living family member lived there. She agreed to take care of them but was a very harsh and controlling person. She was killed in a robbery gone wrong when he was at the age of 13. They never suffered from the loss of their family member, it was actually quite the opposite. And without any kind of support from adults, he started working part-time and taking care of his brother all alone while taking care of school at the same time. At the age of 16 he was found by a model agency and started working there. Now he's working fulltime as a professional model on national level and currently has found airtreks together with his younger brother.

At school he's an ace student. Some people would actually say the "perfect" student and a genius. He's loved by both students and teachers because of this. (and his looks of course) However the rumor about him being a genius is definitely not correct. Oskar has always studied his hardest to be able to support his brother. That's one of his goals in life and have always been.

Being the most popular student also have it's downsides. He's being the greatest target of the schools troublemakers. However, most of the time they fail to do him anything since he often outsmarts them. But there have been times when he's gotten into trouble. One time he was attacked by a motorcycle gang "hired" by the schools troublemakers. However he managed to get away with some bruises and a black eye.

Since he's not so fond of his own history, he tries to keep it a secret from people. Therefore a big part of his life is just a complete mystery. Will you be the one to find out his story of life?

EXTRA

Extra:
- Working as a professional model

Roleplay Sample:
The wind against his cheeks.. The chilly breeze which comes from speed. Speed in like moving fast. Really fast.
He's soaring in the skys. Climbing from rooftop to rooftop. This is real freedom.

Suddenly a black figure shows up behind him out of nowhere. He senses danger and accelerates faster, trying to get away from the shadow hunting him from behind. The person behind him is quickly catching up and the feeling of danger is rapidly getting stronger as every second passes.

In an attempt to get away he does what he does best. He jumps up against the wall and once again feel precisely what he felt earlier. The feeling of freedom. But the feeling is shortlived as the weels slam against the wooden wall and he's rising up faster and faster against the wall. The sound of the treks against the wall are loud and noisy but he ignores it. All that's in his head right now is to get away, and that's quickly. Somewhere he sees a light.. He's still accelerating, going faster than ever before. Everything feels so easy.

Earlier he had the feeling of freedom but still some constriction. Now he's not bound to the ground anymore. This is complete freedom. There are no skills nor laws that binds him. Inside him a sensation is building up. Jumping over one obstacle after another, from wall to wall..

Now he knows how it feels to be invincible. The feeling of danger is slowly disappering as he's outrunning the shadow behind him. He's quickly leaving him behind and while looking back, it's almost like time is standing still. He's invincible. He's free..

HollowKing
06-17-2008, 04:23 PM
OK, Osskie, im one of the most online members of the RPG, and hopefully im here to just take a quick look at your app, and help ya out, before the mods get to ya! So lets begin...

BTW, remember this is just advice from me, you do not need to take it, but it would be advisable! ^^

anyway lets start


1) General Section

- OK, the clubs match up, and so on and the Stats match up as well...

- OK, first slight issue, your AT information, is slightly small, i know you are a capable person, and you can surely make it better, just make it more descriptive and add designs, different stitching or patters or different wheel colours and so on and so forth...

2) Looks Section

- Well done on including a picture, that helps a great deal, mainly because its easier for the person who is reading your app to be able to visualise your character

- OK overall appearnce description is good, well done, i like his hair by the way, it looks awesome ^^ SO, it seems your all good in this section as well ^^

3) Personality Section

- OK firstly, your likes, and dislikes and everything match up, good job, BUT you could easily make them better and add a couple more it, it makes your character seem better suited and a better thought out person ^^

- OK, Goals, this is a problem, firstly because you do not know that Kings exist, and merely have ATs for simple riding, you need to be taught about this by another rider who is a higher rank as well as you dont know your road until you are told once again about roads by higher ranked riders. So for you to want to surpass the Sky King, this isnt a viable goal at the moment.

- The overall Personality, good job, i liked the way you integrated the clubs he belongs to with his personality, this makes him seem like a more rounded character and well thought out. So good job on this.

4) History Section

- OK, slight problem, the history is a little too short, yup yup your parents dieing is realistic to say the least, but anything about traumas during school life and such? Try and make it longer if you can

5) Role Play Sample Chapter

- OK good start, but where is the rest? Remember this is what people will be looking at to choose if they want to role play with you, if you dont have a gripping role play sample then people will easily be put off. So i like your beginning, but i think you can easily add more to this ^^


OK so dude, they are some tips, and i hope we get to rp together, i like you characte sounds interesting, if you want to look at my application then feel free. Find Fuyu Hideaki in the A ranked Riders section of the RPG registration, and im there ^^

if you have anymore questions then feel free to ask ^^ pm me anytime

and enjoy your RPing experience

Hollow

osskie
06-17-2008, 04:27 PM
Of course I'll take your advice!

I added some to the treks section and I'm updating more and more as time goes actually. Everything doesn't just pop up at the same time in my head ;)

But okay, about the roleplay sample I'll definitely write a better one if what you say is correct. I just didn't really know the importance of it. Now that I know I'll definitely update it.

Thanks a lot for your tip! I'll edit everything that doesn't make sense and I'll try to write a better history as well.

Everything is now updated according to your tips. Hope that it's enough ;D

smoosh
06-17-2008, 10:44 PM
alright nothing really majorly wrong with your app. seeing as how nik helped you through it xD. (damn you nik i've been wanting to kill apps. >_<)

1)
Profession: Professional Model
Civil status: Single
School: Ouran High School

you dont have to put your profession in. if you want to put it in the extra and give it some elaboration.

and you also dont have to put your civil status, and if you wanted to this can go to the extra portion too.

and please..please...dont make me whack you. Ouran high school?! Are you kidding me?! we dont use any of the anime/manga schhool names here. there is a fixed school for the tokyo and kyoto branches in the RP. Tokyo: Higashi High. Kyoto: Katsura High. if you dont want to choose either schools, you can make up your own, just give an explaination and elaboration in the Overall History section.

do that and i or another mod will check back~

~Smooshster.

HollowKing
06-18-2008, 02:57 AM
LOL sorry smooshy, anyway that is one of our RPG mods, she is awesome, and will help you out whenever you need help, and I JUST NOTICED ._.

ANOTHER FREAKING MODEL ARGH!!!!!!!!! >_<

why why why, i need to change my RPC's profession now, EVEN THOUGH its IMPORTANT, anyway well done on the changes, NOW all you have to do, is DO THE THINGS SMOOSHY SAYS, cos mods words are final


ONE MORE IMPORTANT THING, please check grammar as well as spellings, i just read it and there are some spelling mistake and slight grammar faults, its ok now, but make sure that whenever you RP you ALWAYS do a spell check ^^

and then it should be ok ^^

Hollow

osskie
06-18-2008, 06:16 AM
Smoosh: I fixed what you told me and the elaboration of my profession can be found in my history. (It was there earlier as well, even though it's nothing much)

HollowKing:
Haha. So you're a model too? :D Too bad ^^
I tried checking for errors but since my english isn't flawless (I'm a swede after all), I guess there are still some faults in my grammar and spelling.

And if you had read my complete history, then you'd found out my profession earlier ;)

EDIT: Also I tried to make it look better aesthetically(?).

smoosh
06-18-2008, 07:00 AM
lol heh..good enough for me! is that a real photo of you?~

[ACCEPTED!~] Smooshster.

enjoy your RP-ing experience and i hope to see you around~

osskie
06-18-2008, 07:17 AM
Nah. It's a photo of my best friend :) I thought he fit in better in the image of how I wanted my rider to be and because of his amazing hair I couldn't just keep myself from using it, with his permission though ;D

Awesome. Thanks!

I'll be seeing you around :)