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Ferr
01-31-2011, 11:18 AM
Username: Ferr

GENERAL

Name: Demetori Jawari Aka D.J.
Gender: Male
Age: 17
School: Higashi Junior High-school
School Clubs:
• Math
• Chest
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 10.
• Strength: 10
• Defense: 8
• Speed: 12
• Total Skill Points: 40.

Status: F-class
A-T Information:
To gain some more speed, the A-T has a sharp front is aerodynamic for speed. They are small build and witch a low gravity center for more balance and agility. Their black with both a red dragon on the side. The wheels are also red with a black center. They wheels are also a little smaller to decrease the friction. The metal parts are made of carbon with are light but strong. And he made the brakes stronger so he can stop quicker. This is necessary since he is a speed rider, you need good breaks.


LOOKS

http://i1176.photobucket.com/albums/x337/Ferry_Kielman/Anime-pics-anime-guys-6478884-240-320.jpg

Eye Colour: Blue
Hair Colour: White
Skin Tone: White
Height/Weight: 1, 86 Meters and 65 Kilograms
Blood-type: AB
Overall Appearance:
He wears a red blouse with a white shirt under it. Grey pants with a red belt and usually wears his A-T’s. He comes over like a skinny guy that isn’t much of a big shot, but used his body shape to advance in speed. He is a shy guy and that is seen in the way he skates and walks. He looks to the ground and his shoulders hanging.

He always wears his A-T’s to school, and changes to his regular all stars in school. He skates fast through the streets. His tattoo was a gift from his parents when he turned 16, since they also loved tattoos and he did as well. The dragon symbols power and speed, since they are a race that are most powerful and the fastest sky creatures.

He has a lot of scars running down his legs from his intensive training on A-T’s, what led to many falls and hospital rides. He has one big scar running down his entire left under leg. This leg was broke once and he has a metal plate installed there. This made his leg stronger instead of weaker. Overall he hasn’t any scars on other body parts.

PERSONALITY

Likes:
• Match
• Chest
• Dragons
• A-T’s

Dislikes:
• Reading
• Arrogant people
• Critic bout his look’s.

Hobbies:
• Riding A-T’s

• Playing chest

• Playing guitar

Fears: Spiders, bullies.
Goals: Level up to at least a C-class rider.
Overall Personality:
He has a high interest in match and chest. This gives him a greater spatial awareness. What he uses in A-T battles. It also gives him more knowledge about A-T’s and how to adjust them. His interest in math and chest came from his father, who thought him chest in a young age, and he was always good at math. He has the same interest as a geeky kind of person, but he isn’t a geek at all. He never studies for something and he hates to read books.
He adapts to the environment when it comes towards skating. He is shy and hasn’t many friends. He is really nice towards others, and his friends. He hates bullies and sees no use in the actions that make people feel hurt while he gains joy out it. Therefore he is always nice the others in the hope they will be nice to him to. This is not always happening. If people make fun of him and laugh at him, he fights back. His shy appearance and the look of being weak, this is all an illusion. He can punch and harder then he looks. So he mostly fights his bullies
He has a cheerful personality; he doesn’t sit home and being depressed about certain things that happened in school. He enjoys live and loves to skate around and breathe the air and feel the wind.

HISTORY

Birthplace: Born in the Netherlands, Breda. But moved to Tokyo
Birthdate: 23-06-1993
Birthtime: 10 minutes before two in the afternoon
Parents: Berry (52) & Evalien (45). Divorced
Siblings: None

Overall History:
He was born in a small town in the Netherlands. When he was born his parents where already fighting, but stayed together for the sake of their child. When he was 5 his dad taught him how to play chest. His mother was bad at the game and his dad loved to play. After some time he began to show some talents in this game as well as in math. This was passed on him from his dad; who also had a talent in these things. At the age of 10 he moved to Tokyo with his dad, his mother stayed in Holland. Before they moved his father touched him some basic Japanese so he could understand them. In school he picked up more of the language.

After they got in Tokyo he discovered A-T’s and he had to get them. But his dad thought his was to young. He didn’t sit back and went on discovering all there is to A-T’s. They way they where build; parts, gears, engines and constructions. On his 14th birthday he got his first A-T’s and since that day he always skated. One day when he was just 15 he tried to gap a great distance over the river. This was a doom day for him; as soon as he jumped he knew it went bad. He gapped the river but landed with his leg against a guardrail. He crushed the bone in his left leg and he was rushed to the hospital. Since that day he had a metal plate in his left leg.

At the age of 16 he got his tattoo and a matching pair of A-T’s. Still with the accident in his mind he wanted to modify them. He constructed them in the way they had more speed and strength. He spent the most of his time training and adjusting his A-T’s to the way it suits him perfectly. Since his dad had a business running, he didn’t have to look for cheap parts. His dad had a business in automation of factories. He had learned to build A-T’s from his dad, since he had a great intersession in the electronics of A-T’s. They worked mostly together building it, but Demetori preferred modifying them himself. Since his dad didn’t really knew what he wanted to be done to them. He just started to die his hair white, since he thinks its cooler that way.

EXTRA

Extra: N/A
Roleplay Sample:
Demetori skated throughout Tokyo. He felt the warm air running around him. It was a nice warm summer day, and since he skipped school he could train his skills. He left his shirt at home and he opened his blouse. The warmth made his back sweaty and he needed some cooling. He rushed down the street: it was placed in 10% down. He went almost too fast and hoped that the traffic light would jump to green as he neared the crossroad. It stayed on red and he watched for cars, there where allot of them and his went straight for them. ‘aah s&&t, stop you dump cars.’ Crossed his mind as he saw the cars stopping slowly for the traffic light. As he rushed under the traffic lights it jumped to green. His luck of the day.
At the end of the street was an ice cream shop and he wanted one badly. He entered the shop and saw his best friend sitting there. “Hee buddy. What are you doing here don’t you have school haha “ he laughed and sat down at the other side of the table. ”yo, I could ask you exactly the same question” his friend replied. They talked about the summer and what they should do on this free day. Demetori order a chocolate ice cream and he enjoy the refreshing cool ice running down his throat into his stomach.

He hoped that he could skate with his friend, but he had already planned a date so Demetori was left alone for the rest of the day. He went home and just decided to learn some new songs on his guitar, and made some homework for the next day since he can’t really stay home for the rest of the week.

AnjaChan
01-31-2011, 01:19 PM
Okay a few things:
1- Why is his hair white?
2- Did he learn to speak Japanese?
3- Understand that regardless of how long you've "practiced" you are still just a beginning in this RP.

Ferr
01-31-2011, 03:43 PM
I changed them.
and I understand that I'm still a beginner.

AnjaChan
01-31-2011, 05:03 PM
Okay, you are good to go.

Approved!

Ferr
02-10-2011, 01:40 AM
Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetro Jawari

Proof: Towards the sun Self training
Post Number(s): #1 #2 #3 #4 #5 #6
24tp * 1.5 = 36tp
Total = 7SP +1TP


Proof: KeeP You In The DarK Special training
Post Number(s): #2 #4 #6 #8 #10 # 12 #14
56 * 2 = 112 * 1.5 = 168tp
Total = [i]33sp + 3tp[i]


Proof: A trip to Kyoto City Social
Post Number(s): #1 #3 # 7 #12 # 22
9 * 1.5 = 12tp
Total = 2sp + 2tp

Total Gains: 201tp = 40sp 1tp

You need to keep a much closer eye on how long your paragraphs are. You have really long run on sentences, paragraphs that just don't have enough sentences period to get you TP, or sentences that are way too short for me to give you credit for even when I'm being really easy. Which I was. I highly recommend you go and reread the Training Guidelines and if you've still got any questions after that, feel free to PM me. Also, congratz on making it to E class. I'll move your character to the appropriate subforum.

Approved! by CloudShadow

Ferr
02-10-2011, 01:48 AM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 22. (+12)
• Strength: 21(+11)
• Defense: 12(+4)
• Speed: 25(+13)
• Total Skill Points: 80

color=darkred]Road: The bloody road.[/color]

Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetro Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)

Proof: Towards the sun (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10200) Self training
Post Number(s): #1 #2 #3 #4 #5 #6
24tp * 1.5 = 36tp
Total = 7SP +1TP


Proof: KeeP You In The DarK (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=123165#post123165) Special training
Post Number(s): #2 #4 #6 #8 #10 # 12 #14
56 * 2 = 112 * 1.5 = 168tp
Total = [i]33sp + 3tp[i]

Ferr
02-10-2011, 03:17 PM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 22.
• Strength: 22 (+1)
• Defense: 12
• Speed: 25
• Total Skill Points: 81 / 3TP

Road: The bloody road.

Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetro Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)
Proof: Towards the sun (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10200) Self training
Post Number:#7
Tp = 5 * 1.5 = 7.5
Total = 1sp 2.5tp

Demetori Jawari onto the Bloody Rood

lolwat? Your character just magically knew he reached E rank? XD Interesting... Anyway, I'll go add you to the massive list of Bloody Road Riders

Approved! by CloudShadow

He doesn't know, he thinks he is xD since he improved his time so much haha

Ferr
02-13-2011, 06:10 AM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 22.
• Strength: 22
• Defense: 12
• Speed: 26 (+1)
• Total Skill Points: 82 / 2TP

[spoiler]
Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetro Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)
Amount of TP: 6
Proof: New Country, New School, Same Crap (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=123054#post123054)
Post Number(s): #2 #4 #6
Total: 4 TP

Man, you keep killing yourself with short sentences, or run-ons. You need to watch out for that.
Approved! by AnjaChan
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Ferr
02-13-2011, 05:55 PM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 25 (+3)
• Strength: 26 (+4)
• Defense: 12
• Speed: 26
• Total Skill Points: 89 / 3TP


Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetro Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)
Proof: KeeP You In The DarK (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=123165#post123165) Special training
Post Number(s): #16 #18
Total TP: 26 (24 + 2 remaing) 38 (24 * 1.5 = 36 + 2 remaining = 38)
SP: 5 7sp 3tp

Approved! by CloudShadow

Ferr
02-15-2011, 10:08 AM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 26 +1
• Strength: 26
• Defense: 12
• Speed: 26
• Total Skill Points: 90 / 4TP


Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetroi Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)
Proof: A trip to Kyoto City (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10201&page=3) Social
Post Number(s): #28
4 * 1.5 = 6 + 3 left
Total = 1 SP
4 TP

Your New RPer bonus ended yesterday, so this will be the last SP claim you get with the 50% boost from it. Just a heads up.

Approved! by CloudShadow

Ferr
02-24-2011, 06:49 PM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 26 +7
• Strength: 26 + 7
• Defense: 12
• Speed: 26 + 7
• Total Skill Points: 90 / 4TP +101TP

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 33
• Strength: 33
• Defense: 12
• Speed: 33
• Total Skill Points: 111


Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetroi Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)
Proof:Boring school, and I hate every minute of it (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=123465#post123465)
Post Number(s):
#3: 5TP
#5: 2TP
#7: 2TP
#9: 2TP
#11: 2 TP
#13: 2 TP

Sub-Total: 15TP


Proof:New Country, New School, Same Crap (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10205&page=2)
Post Number(s):#11 : 2 TP

Sub-total= 17TP

Proof:The Dragons Den (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=123500#post123500")
Post Number(s):
#1 : 10 TP
#2 : 10 TP
#3 : 10 TP
#4 : 10 TP
#5 : 10 TP
#6 : 10 TP

Sub-total= 77TP

Proof:Keep You in the DarK (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10206&page=2)
Post Number(s):
#20 :10 TP
#22: 14 TP

Sub-total= 101TP

4 TP Remaining

Total TP = 105
SP = 21
TP = 0

Thanks ^^

Approved! By Vincent Steel.

Ferr
03-07-2011, 02:59 PM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 33 +3
• Strength: 33 +3
• Defense: 12 +1
• Speed: 33 +3
• Total Skill Points: 111 + 7

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 36
• Strength: 36
• Defense: 13
• Speed: 36
• Total Skill Points: 118






Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetroi Jawari


Socials

Proof: A trip to Kyoto City Social +
Post Number(s):
#39 TP 3
#45 TP 2

sub Total TP = 5


Sel training

Proof: Dragons Den
Post Number(s):
#7 TP 9 8

sub Total TP = 14

Team

Proof: Choosing the team
Post Number(s):
#1 TP 4.5
#3 TP 3
#5 TP 4.5
#7 TP 4.5
#9 TP 4.5

sub Total = 35 TP

Total SP = 7
Total TP =0

Sorry about the delay. We're going to give you the Team Training this time, but from now on you have to wait for a third member to post before you two can continue posting or you won't get the bonus for that posting round, alright?

Approved! by CloudShadow

Ferr
03-08-2011, 04:35 PM
total SP is 121

Ferr
03-14-2011, 03:37 AM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 36 + 6
• Strength: 36
• Defense: 13
• Speed: 36
• Total Skill Points: 121 + 6

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 36
• Defense: 13
• Speed: 36
• Total Skill Points: 127


Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 36 + 6
• Strength: 36
• Defense: 13
• Speed: 36
• Total Skill Points: 121 + 6
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Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 36
• Defense: 13
• Speed: 36
• Total Skill Points: 127
[/color]

Ferr
03-16-2011, 05:25 PM
Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetroi Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)

¬Social¬

Proof: A Trip to Kyoto (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10201&page=5)
Post Number(s):
#49 Tp:2

sub Total TP = 2

¬Self training¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#

sub Total TP = 2

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: [url=http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124133#post124133]keep you in the dark (][/url)
Post Number(s):
#24 TP: 6
( keep you in the dark finished )

sub Total TP = 8

¬Team¬

Proof: Choosing the team (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10264&page=2)
Post Number(s):
#12 TP:4.5
#14 TP:4.5

sub Total = 17

¬Battle¬

Proof: JACKPOT! Versus T O T E zeit-- A Battle for

Palette Town (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10313)
Post Number(s):
# 2 TP: 3
# 11 TP:2
# 15 TP:2
# 17 TP:2
# 20 TP:2
# 22 TP:2

sub Total = 30

Total SP = 6
Total TP = 0

Approved! by AnjaChan
proof

Ferr
03-23-2011, 02:26 PM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 36 + 4
• Speed: 36 + 5
• Defense: 13
• Total Skill Points: 127+9 & 2tp

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 40
• Speed: 41
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 136 (2tp)



Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetroi Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)

¬Social¬

Proof: _-The AT Golden Hour-_ (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124816#post124816) +
Post Number(s):
#6 TP:5


sub Total TP = 5

¬Self training¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#

sub Total TP = 0

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: [url=http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10326]800 yen, and bring your own snacks. (][/url)
Post Number(s):
#2 TP:6
#4 TP:8
#6 TP:8
#8 TP:8
sub Total TP = 30

¬Team¬

Proof: Choosing the team. (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10264&page=2) +
Post Number(s):
#16 TP:6
(finished)

Proof: Ground Zero JACKPOT! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124593#post124593) +
Post Number(s):
#1 TP:6


sub Total = 47

¬Battle¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#

sub Total = 47
Total SP = 9
Remaining : 2TP

You messed up your math in your STing for your total (15 * 2 = 30, not 35) and you can't have 5tp from a nonexistant Self Training thread, and yet you still ended up having the correct total somehow. Other than that I'm glad to see your paragraphs generally getting longer.

Approved! by CloudShadow

Ferr
03-27-2011, 03:37 PM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 40 +4
• Speed: 41
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 136 +3

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 43
• Speed: 41
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 139

Tricks
E : Fire!
D :
C :
B :
A :



Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetroi Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)

¬Social¬

Proof: _-The AT Golden Hour-_ (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124816#post124816)
Post Number(s):
#9 TP:3

sub Total TP = 3

¬Self training¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#

sub Total TP = 3

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: [url=http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10326]800 yen, and bring your own snacks. (][/url)
Post Number(s):
#10
sub Total TP = 3

¬Team¬

Proof: Ground Zero JACKPOT! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124593#post124593)
Post Number(s):
#4 TP:12

sub Total =15

¬Battle¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#
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sub Total = 15

Total TP = 15
Total SP = 3
Remaining: 0TP
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Trick claim
Fire!
Rank: E

Requirement: Strength: 50
Type: Offensive
Target: Single
In RP description: This trick is inherently simply a powerful charge followed with an attack with abuses the momentum of the charge. It also allows for the very potential yet higher ranked trick: Second Round Fire!!
Ruling: the damage for this trick = normal damage * 1.1.


You only had 15 TP, not 18. Also, I find it really confusing when people add in their left over TP to their new TP claim. Try not to do that. Either way, sorry, man, you didn't quite made D.

Approved! by AnjaChan

Ferr
03-28-2011, 03:07 AM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 43+1
• Speed: 41
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 139 +1

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 44
• Speed: 41
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 140

Tricks
E : Fire!
D : Second Round Fire!
C :
B :
A :




Username: Ferr
RPC: Demetroi Jawari (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10195)

¬Social¬

Proof: _-The AT Golden Hour-_ (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124816#post124816)
Post Number(s):
#12 TP:5

sub Total TP = 5

¬Self training¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#

sub Total TP = 5

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: [url=http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10326]800 yen, and bring your own snacks. (][/url)
Post Number(s):
#
sub Total TP = 5

¬Team¬

Proof: Ground Zero JACKPOT! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124593#post124593)
Post Number(s):
#

sub Total =5

¬Battle¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#

sub Total = 5

Total TP = 5
Total SP = 1
Remaining: 0TP


Trick claim


Second Round Fire!
Rank: D
Requirement: Strength: 70
Type: Offensive
Target: Single
In RP description: This trick is a bit more complex then its Fire! counterpart since it uses an element of surprise and a very quick change of direction to maximize impact. After using the Fire! trick the rider does not stop and with a few very rapid steps the rider is capable of following the opponent who tried to put distance to regroup and hit him again with even more power.
Ruling: This trick can only be used if the trick Fire! was used during your last cycle. The damage for this trick = normal damage * 1.3.

Now he should be D rank. Thanx

Approved! by AnjaChan

Ferr
03-28-2011, 12:25 PM
Second Round Fire!
Rank: D
Requirement: Strength: 70
Type: Offensive
Target: Single
In RP description: This trick is a bit more complex then its Fire! counterpart since it uses an element of surprise and a very quick change of direction to maximize impact. After using the Fire! trick the rider does not stop and with a few very rapid steps the rider is capable of following the opponent who tried to put distance to regroup and hit him again with even more power.
Ruling: This trick can only be used if the trick Fire! was used during your last cycle. The damage for this trick = normal damage * 1.3.

Ferr
04-03-2011, 06:48 AM
¬Social¬

Proof: _-The AT Golden Hour-_ (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124816#post124816)
Post Number(s):
#15 TP: 5
#19 TP: 2
#
#

sub Total TP = 7


¬Self training¬

Proof: D.J. Vs Ground Zero! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=125214#post125214)
Post Number(s):
#1 Tp 6
#2 TP 5
#
#

sub Total TP = 18

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: 800 yen, and bring your own snacks. (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10326)
Post Number(s):
#10 TP 8
#12 TP 8
#
#

sub Total TP = 34

¬Team¬

Proof: Ground Zero JACKPOT! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124593#post124593)
Post Number(s):
#7 TP: 6
#
#
#

sub Total = 40

¬Battle¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total = 40

Total SP = 8
Remaining TP: 0


Approved! by AnjaChan

Ferr
04-03-2011, 06:49 AM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 44 +6
• Speed: 41 +2
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 140 + 8
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Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 50
• Speed: 43
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 148
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Ferr
04-03-2011, 06:50 AM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 44 +6
• Speed: 41 +2
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 140 + 8

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42
• Strength: 50
• Speed: 43
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 148

Tricks
E : Fire!
D : Second Round Fire!
C :
B :
A :


[spoiler]
[COLOR="green"]¬Social¬

Ferr
04-29-2011, 12:07 PM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 42 +8
• Strength: 50
• Speed: 43 +4
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 148

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 50
• Strength: 50
• Speed: 47
• Defense: 13
Total Skill Points: 156

Tricks
E : Fire!
D : Second Round Fire!
C :
B :
A :


¬Social¬

Proof: _-The AT Golden Hour-_ (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124816#post124816)
Post Number(s):
#23 5 +
#26 2 +
#30 2 +
#

sub Total TP = 9 +


¬Self training¬

Proof: D.J. Vs Ground Zero! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=125214#post125214)
Post Number(s):
#3 9 +
#4 4 +
#
#

sub Total TP = 22 +

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: 800 yen, and bring your own snacks. (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10326)
Post Number(s):
#14 10 +
#16 10 +
#
#

sub Total TP = 42 +

¬Team¬

Proof: Ground Zero JACKPOT! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124593#post124593)
Post Number(s):
#10 6 +
#13 6 +
#17 6 +
# 0

sub Total = 60 +

¬Battle¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total = 60 +

Total SP = 12 +
Remaining TP: 0


Approved! by CloudShadow

Ferr
05-16-2011, 12:15 PM
Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 50+1
• Strength: 50+1
• Speed: 47+4
• Defense: 13+1
Total Skill Points: 156

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 51
• Strength: 51
• Speed: 51
• Defense: 14
Total Skill Points: 164

Tricks
E : Fire!
D : Second Round Fire!
C :
B :
A :


User = Ferr
RPC = Demetori "D.J." Jawari
¬Social¬

Proof: _-The AT Golden Hour-_ (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124816#post124816)
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total TP = 0


¬Self training¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total TP = 0

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: Gamble with The King of Clubs. (][/url)
Post Number(s):
#1 8
#3 6
#5 8
#7 12
#9 8

sub Total TP = 42

¬Team¬

Proof: Ground Zero JACKPOT! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124593#post124593)
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total = 50

¬Battle¬

Proof: [url=]
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total = 42

Total SP = 8
Remaining TP: 2


Approved! by AnjaChan

Ferr
06-06-2011, 03:46 AM
Skill Stats: + 12
• Stamina: 51 + 4
• Strength: 51 + 4
• Speed: 51 + 4
• Defense: 14 + 0
Total Skill Points: 164

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 55
• Strength: 55
• Speed: 55
• Defense: 14
Total Skill Points: 179

Tricks
E : Fire!
[s]D : Second Round Fire!
C :
B :
A :[/]
User = Ferr
RPC = Demetori "D.J." Jawari
¬Social¬

Proof: _-The AT Golden Hour-_ (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124816#post124816)
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total TP = 0


¬Self training¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total TP = 0

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: Gamble with The King of Clubs. (][/url)
Post Number(s):
#11 10 +
#13 10 +
#15 18 +
#17 10 +
#19 10 +

sub Total TP = 58 +

¬Team¬

Proof: Ground Zero JACKPOT! (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=124593#post124593)
Post Number(s):
# 0
# 0
# 0
# 0

sub Total = 58

¬Battle¬

Proof: [url=]
Post Number(s):
#
#
#
#

sub Total = 58
Previous claim 2

Total TP: 60 +
Total SP = 12 +
Remaining TP: 0


Approved! by CloudShadow

Ferr
07-06-2011, 03:40 PM
Skill Stats: + 9
• Stamina: 55 + 3
• Strength: 55 + 3
• Speed: 55 + 3
• Defense: 14 +
Total Skill Points: 179

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 58
• Strength: 58
• Speed: 58
• Defense: 14
Total Skill Points: 188

[/COLOR]
Tricks
E : Fire!
[s]D : Second Round Fire!
C :
B :
A :[/] [/SIZE]
User = Ferr
RPC = Demetori "D.J." Jawari
¬Social¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):


sub Total TP = 0


¬Self training¬

Proof: Finding the Bloody Road +
Post Number(s):
#1; 5
#2; 8


sub Total TP = 13

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: Gamble with The King of Clubs. +
Post Number(s):
#21; 8
#23; 18


sub Total TP = 39

¬Team¬

Proof: :: JACKPOT! Team Training] K♣ [Straight Flush!] :: JACKPOT! Team Training +
Post Number(s):
#3; 6


sub Total = 45

¬Battle¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):


sub Total = 45
Previous claim

Total TP: 45 +
Total SP = 9 +
Remaining TP: 0


You should claim your STing sooner. You were really close to the limit, if you had waited another day you wouldn't have gotten credit for the first post and that would have sucked o.o

Approved! by CloudShadow

Ferr
07-28-2011, 09:05 PM
Skill Stats: + 9
• Stamina: 58 + 3
• Strength: 58 + 3
• Speed: 58 + 3
• Defense: 14 +
Total Skill Points: 188

Skill Stats:
• Stamina: 61
• Strength: 61
• Speed: 61
• Defense: 14
Total Skill Points: 197


Tricks
E : Fire!
D : Second Round Fire!
C :
B :
A :
[spolier]
User = Ferr
RPC = Demetori "D.J." Jawari
¬Social¬

Proof: stretch, stretch, yawn (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10696)
Post Number(s):
#;4 5


sub Total TP = 5


¬Self training¬

Proof: Finding the Bloody Road (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?p=128658#post128658)
Post Number(s):
#3; 8
#4; 7


sub Total TP = 20

¬Speciale training¬

Proof: Blňódy Crüsh (http://www.soralounge.com/showthread.php?t=10778)
Post Number(s):
#2; 10
#4; 10


sub Total TP = 40

¬Team¬

Proof: K♣ [Straight Flush!] :: JACKPOT! Team Training
Post Number(s):
#6; 3
#9; 6


sub Total = 49

¬Battle¬

Proof:
Post Number(s):


sub Total = 49
Previous claim 0

Total TP: 49
Total SP = 9
Remaining TP: 4


There were a few cases where you were cutting pretty close as far as sentences go. Personally, I'd aim to make paragraphs that are at least 4 line widths high; it'll help you tell whether or not you may need to recheck some of your paragraphs and add more words.

Approved by Jade ~[/spoiler]