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[McEnroe]

Username: McEnroe

GENERAL

Name: Vincent "V" Díaz
Gender: M
Age: 16
School: Higashi High
School Clubs:

* Art Club

Skill Stats:

Stamina: 20 (+10)
Strength: 20 (+12)
Defense: 15 (+8)
Speed: 66 (+51)
Total Skill Points: 121. (+81)

Status: F-class
Road: Haven't decided a name yet (I accept suggestions).

The idea is to use the wasted energy in the ATs movement to power an air circulation devise, it works as a wheel rotation powered air conditioning system.

It absorbs hot air and releases really cold air. This way, it lowers the air temperature around the rider.

The main difference with an air conditioner is that it don't let the hot air loose but stores the heat within the AT, being able to release in an instant by counter-rotating the wheels.

By releasing all the stored hit in an instant it produces a powerful current of hot air, that would move even faster because of the lowered air temperature of the environment.This air current can be used both as propulsion for air tricks and to improve the attack power of kicks.

V combines speed style riding and martial art movements to alternate rotation fast rotation and sudden counter rotation, thus alternates absorbing the heat, lowering the temperature, and releasing it in strong currents.

For now as an F class rider he just combines the speed riding and kung fu in a peculiar way of riding and unique tricks.


http://sp7.fotologs.net/photo/55/0/115/fran_2_cesco/1193427915_f.jpg



http://sp7.fotologs.net/photo/55/0/115/fran_2_cesco/1194376706_f.jpg

Eye Colour: Blue
Hair Colour: Black
Skin Tone: Light tan
Height/Weight: 6' / 170 lbs
Blood-type: A+
Overall Appearance:
Usually expressionless and stoic, V has a really cold look on his deep blue eyes all the time. He doesn't care much about his looks, so even though he stays clean, he doesn't cut his hair usually. Hiss messy overgrown hair most of the time partially covers his icy blue eyes, making his looks even darker sometimes.
Most of the time, when he's not in his school or kung fu uniforms, he wears jeans, not tight but not baggy either, just comfortably loose, and plain tshirts, some times spattered with paint. He's usually seen with zip up hodies or a black jacket on top of his T-shirts.
See drawings above.

PERSONALITY

Likes:

* Quiet places
* Adrenaline

Dislikes:

* Arrogant/Loud People
* War
* Crowds

Hobbies:

* Painting
* Martial Arts
* ATs

Fears: To loose the little people he still has he holds dear and thus, stay alone
Goals: To get better and better to experiment happiness through extreme adrenaline
Overall Personality: Silent and cold, a guy of few words, but self righteous and kind hearted. He likes to help people, but have a hard time making friends, he don't like to get too close to people for fear of loosing them afterwards.

HISTORY

Birthplace: Buenos Aires, Argentina
Birthdate: 10/21/1991
Birthtime: 2:00 AM
Parents: Father: Jorge Díaz (Argentinean, RIP),
Mother: Hilda Van Eyk (Dutch, RIP)
Siblings: -

Overall History:

V's mother was a renown Dutch painter, and died giving him birth. After that V grew up in Buenos Aires with his father, a surgeon. He was a joyful and talented child, loved painting and reading and enjoyed playing soccer with other kids. That was until his father went with the UNO Blue Helmets to help in the Serbian-Croatian conflict and died in a Hospital hit by a bomb in Kosovo when he was ten.

After that he went to live to Japan with his grandfather Ruben Díaz, a weird Argentinean anthropologist doing research on oriental cultures. But he was no longer the same kid. He was silent most of the time, painting, He almost didn't talk. He was a peaceful kid, but when he lost his patience he had uncontrollable attacks of rage. In order to help him control this situation, his grandfather signed him in to practice kung-fu, with great results, since not only he learned to manage his anger but became really good at it. Just arrived in Japan V knew very little Japanese and had absolutely no friends, but he had learned english on elementary school, which made it easy to communicate Wu xiang, the Shaolin monk that was master of the temple where his grandfather sent him. At that time the temple had only a couple of really old students that stayed after the old master passed away, abandoning training not long after to take the place of monks at the temple. The Shaolin master had been more than just that to V, he had been his mentor and friend. The closest thing to a family V had known, letting apart his weird grandfather. Being his only disciple, Xiang taught V everything he had learned during his long years of study, developing an affection bond towards the kid too. V spent most of his afternoons at the temple, training.

V found in sport kung fu fighting a great source of adrenaline, which made him feel momentarily really happy, a sensation he wasn't used to. After that he started seeking more adrenaline everyday since it was shortest road for happiness he knew, he always needed more, like a drug. That's why when he found out about ATs in high school, he got into it and practiced, combining a really fast riding style with his Kung fu moves to achieve a unique style of acrobatics and feel amazing sensations through this whole new experience.

Kung-fu Master: Wu Xiang is a small person, only 5' 4'' tall. At first sight in his loose light orange linen garbs, he don't seem as muscular and athletic as he really is. He is 42 years old, but looks younger, his calmed and soft face made even softer by his clean shaved, brilliant head. Constantly smiling.
The chinese master was the only son of a traditional chinese family, his father had been the representative of the HSBC in united states so Xiang lived his childhood and youth in New York city. At age four his father got him into the USA Shaolin Temple (OOC: The place actually exists. Broadway and Grand St) were he started his martial arts training and his education in Chan Buddhism. By the time he finished school, just

[McEnroe]

Sorry, I screwed up with the SP I thought in was a minimum of 10 in stamina. And I reconsidered a bit:).
The SP should be:

Stamina: 10
Strength: 8
Defense: 7
Speed: 15
Total Skill Points: 40.

What I wrote on road was no more than an explanation of it's principles I don't expect to have that ability until further on. I was thinking about my skill as F class to be only using the movement speed and martial art moves combined to power up the attacks and improve tricks.

I'm adding here the drawings I did for the character to
http://sp7.fotologs.net/photo/55/0/115/fran_2_cesco/1193427915_f.jpg

After posting this I realized I could edit posts, so I'm editing my character sheet, Sory, I'm new to this forum thing.:)

[penguinism]

only 1 thing:
ur road: burning ice?...burning or ice...choose one ;p makes no sense that u would have both considering theyre exactly opposites of eachother

[McEnroe]

Not if you see them as counterpoints of the same thing, a bit of ying yang ;p. The ability itself is the control of air temperature. Containing the heat, chilling the atmosphere for a sudden outburst of heat. Just like the character does to he's grief and anger. Had to do with the personality.

[Ayuki]

Okay. You say it generates "freezing cold", and then being able to unleash HEAT? "Being able" - I could imagine MELTED ice, but...
That makes no sense! DUDE. Stick with one or the other (cold or heat).

[McEnroe]

Well I guess if I have to stick to one of them, the cold fits the character better, so I'll edit the application with a new road description.

But well it should be, something like absorbing heat powered by the fast rotation of the wheels, generating low temperatures, freezing the air, creating a trail of ice under his ATs or producing shards of ice that will shoot out of them by kicking, and slowly freezing the opponent with successive hits, slowing his movements.

[Ayuki]

Well, first of all, your road acts as if it has a REGALIA.
You should wait till you're C-rank or higher to obtain that ability.

So, for now, I'd suggest you to tone the road down a bit for later.

[White Len]

Username: McEnroe


Status: F-class
Road: Freezing Road. The road consists of absorbing heat powered by the fast rotation of the wheels, generating low temperatures, freezing the air, creating a trail of ice under his ATs or producing shards of ice that will shoot out of them by kicking, and slowly freezing the opponent with successive hits, slowing his movements. At his current state V can no more than generate a cool breeze.
A-T Information: All black with a bluish metallic glow.

http://sp7.fotologs.net/photo/55/0/115/fran_2_cesco/1193427915_f.jpg

Eye Colour: Dark Blue
Hair Colour: Black
Skin Tone: Light tan
Height/Weight: 6' / 150 lbs
Blood-type: A+
Overall Appearance:

PERSONALITY

Likes:

* Quiet places
* Adrenaline
* Tango

Dislikes:

* Arrogant/Loud People
* War
* Real fighting / Hearting people

Hobbies:

* Painting
* Martial Arts
* ATs

Fears: To loose the little people he still has he holds dear and thus, stay alone

Goals: To get better and better to experiment happiness through extreme adrenaline

Overall Personality: Silent and cold, a guy of few words, but self righteous and kind hearted. He likes to help people, but have a hard time making friends, he don't like to get too close to people for fear of loosing them afterwards.

HISTORY

Birthplace: Buenos Aires, Argentina
Birthdate: 10/21/1991
Birthtime: 2:00 AM
Parents: Father: Jorge Díaz (Argentinean, RIP),
Mother: Hilda Van Eyk (Dutch, RIP)
Siblings: -

Overall History: V's mother was a renown Dutch paintress (is that the female for painter), and died giving him birth. After that V grew up in Buenos Aires with his father, a surgeon. He was a joyful and talented child, loved painting and reading and enjoyed playing soccer with other kids. That was until his father went with the UNO Blue Helmets to help in the Serbian-Croatian conflict and died in a Hospital hit by a bomb in Kosovo.
After that he went to live to Japan with his grandfather Ruben Díaz, a weird Argentinean anthropologist doing research on oriental cultures. But he was no longer the same kid. He was silent most of the time, painting, He almost didn't talk. He was a peaceful kid, but when he lost his patience he had uncontrollable attacks of rage. In order to help him control this situation, his grandfather signed him in to practice kung-fu, with great results since not only he learned to manage his anger but became really good at it. He got used to this life and became really fond of his grandfather and his kung-fu master, who became his mentor and only friend. He found in sport kung fu fighting a great source of adrenaline, which made him feel momentarily really happy, a sensation he wasn't used t

Moderately satisfiable history but still needs few things. I don't see how kung fu would have been recommended for calming his anger management. If it was that bad it would have been advisable to seek a psychiatrist or a hypnotist rather than practicing martial arts which can later be used when he is in rage. I just don't see it working and would like you to change the way he learned kung fu. Paintress is not a word, stick to painter since we don't see writeress or singeress. How old was he when his father died? and how old was he when he came to Japan with his granddad? Can you tell us in more depth how his anger becomes so serious and harmful to others? What happened in the past when he lost control? How did he learn of AT? What inspired him to ride the winds? since when did he become a stormrider? what age? How did he discover his road?

Speaking of which your road.

Road: Freezing Road. The road consists of absorbing heat powered by the fast rotation of the wheels, generating low temperatures, freezing the air, creating a trail of ice under his ATs or producing shards of ice that will shoot out of them by kicking, and slowly freezing the opponent with successive hits, slowing his movements. At his current state V can no more than generate a cool breeze.

I understood up to absorbing heat, presumably into energy of some sort likely electricity? If not it makes little sense in what way his AT absorbs the heat. Generating Low temperatures? How? Freezing the air? with what? Might I remind you that your AT generates heat which is absorbed in the AT meaning it would make the AT considerably hot unless its converted to electrical current stored inside a battery of some sort? So far you listed very little detail on the process of how your AT absorbed heat energy, how that is converted into low temperature of which you failed to point out (assumably below freezing point), and how such events can generate a trail of ice under the wheels. Unlike Gabishi and Agito's regalias, your also saying that your AT can shoot out shards of ice which unlike the Fang or the Horn regalia isn't made of wind but a more denser material Ice which naturally is alot heavier to simply fire at people. Also generally speaking, should your trail of ice AT creates ice shards, its probable that the shards would stick to your wheels making it difficult to move around with let alone fire them like projectiles. Only plausible method I can think of for an Ice Regalia to even exist is if you combine Nike/Sora's ability to create wind and add that with the Water regalia or someone proficient in the use of using Lather Road. Current explanation not only lacks detail it makes little to no sense in regards to OG! physics which to say is 75% bullsh!t none the less in comparison to real life physics. As told by Ayuki, reconsider your hopes of getting a Ice Regalia or its road unless you have thought this out flawlessly and your well prepared to satisfy me at least before you ask the actual mods.

[McEnroe]

First of all thanks for the language pointer, I didn't know if there was such a word (note that's why I ASKED). I'm sorry about my english... I'd love to give your spanish a try!!!:)

Now about the story, I should have added some dates, his father died when he was about ten, and usually when you become an orphan you go to your nearest family member or to an orphanage immediately, or at least that's how it's done in the southern hemisphere. About the anger, I never said it was that bad, I mean, he was a 10/12 year old child, what could have he done, kick some furniture? throw dishes around? punch his teacher? didn't think what happened when he was angry was relevant in an OVERALL history. Also, anyone who knows something about oriental culture knows that most Martial Arts are not only a fighting style but a mental exercise and most of them have a philosophy behind them. In fact kung fu isn't only that. Kung fu is a life style. It's the way of life taken by the budist shaolin monks in the Himalayas and afterwards most of china, which includes a fighting style that's based on the primal martial arts that where created in the north of India. But that's just a part of it, in fact it's mainly the study of the control of the body through meditation and mind control, and as most things in chinese philosophy it's concept of perfection is achieved through balance. In fact kung fu it's just an ancient chinese term to define a level of mastery, achieved in any activity following the shao lin ways, you can therefor be a kung fu cook. And apart from that I think it's the kind of thing an anthropologist would do, try a solution he finds within the tradition of the culture he studies, at least the anthropologists I know would...

The rest of the questions you have would have answered themselves if the story was full, but I don't really know why, it didn't uploaded itself in it's full extent. My computer isn't working well this past few days. But I'll update it.

Now about the road, I know what you are trying to say, and I share your point of view. My original road was called burning ice road. When you make the wheels move it generates energy, some is released in the form of heat, some is used for moving, and some is wasted in internal processes of the machinery. The idea was to used the wasted energy, to power an air circulation devise, it worked as a wheel rotation powered air conditioning system. by moving the air it absorbed the heat and released cold air. The main difference with a air conditioner it's that it didn't let the hot air loose but stored the heat within the AT, being able to release in an instant by counter-rotating the wheels. This way it generated a wave of really hot air, that would move even faster in the low temperature environment previously created, that could be used both as propulsion for air tricks and to improve the attack power of the kicks. This way the character combined speed style riding and martial art movements to alternate rotation fast rotation and sudden counter rotation. It was about modifying the tempo of the heat flow, managing at own will, generating opposite extreme air temperatures to use the strong air currents generated this way. It was pure Thermodynamics, it made much more sense than trying to turn the heat into electricity which would be a much greater loss of energy. And it had lots to do with controlling the outer piece and inner rage and sadness, releasing them it and the whole shao lin philosophy of balance of the opposites (ying yang). But that penguin guy and one of the mods thought it made no sense having an ability that included both peaks of temperature. That's Why I had to change it for the senseless road you so much criticize.

Even though we didn't start with the right foot, since I didn't like the tone of your message a bit and I'm pretty sure you didn't like the tone of mine. I think your reflections where, in many cases, accurate and I consider discussing this stuff with you, in a more respectful manner, might have a good outcome.

Hope you read this and reply,
ME

P.D.: I might have failed with the name of the original road

[Jaelon]

ok to all people that want to use a "Cold" road eventually eventually say that there are additional pressure sensors on your toes allowing the the wheels to spin off the ground and similiar to the rumbling regalia it will suck in air but it doesn't need a strong wind to get the process started being able to sustain itself as long as the wheels are spinning. But as a result instead of the powerful blast it sends a chilling wind throught the area freezing, greatly lowering the temp, creating a thin layer of ice, or something come on guys use more of your imagination, you could say something like its adjustable to precise freezing cold shots to a lot lesser effect an a wider area. and a limitation could be something like his mobility is greatly hindered while using this technique but the longer his wheels spin the colder it woul get... don't forget to mention that you would have to be a higher class rider to even do this...

[White Len]

I don't mind the language. At the end of the day I must come off pretty insulting to some anyway and I'm prepared to live with that if it means I can say what I want to without any hesitation. I'm a critic yes but I prefer reasoning than resorting to senseless flame wars. In my perspective, the road you had before made more sense than the road you currently invented. However, the problem with the mods most likely would have come from miscommunication between you and them. I haven't seen the original road you posted but from the sounds of things it may have come across as a power that combined more than one element which would appear too powerful for a rookie to handle. I caught bits and pieces of it and instantly the thing that came to my mind was silver surfer/Iceman/Spitfire molded together. They probably wanted you to be more specific in your specialization instead of moving between cold air and hot air (They simply could have misunderstood, I advise you to re-approach them with the original road and explain clearly what you are trying to achieve.).

Also bare in mind that while its free for you to come up with the idea, I'll warn you again that everyone starts from scratch meaning a F class rider wouldn't have come up with something so complex so early on. Not that you would need it or most likely make much good use of it. So here is my advice. Create your road the way it was (And I hope you didn't just simply delete what you wrote), Under the Extra section I want you to write how it works step by step and make it simple to understand. It doesn't need to be 100% physics since OG uses a messed up physics as well but to a degree. Should your reasoning with Ayuki or Peng be unfruitful contact me and I will try to negotiate your argument across should you be insistent on having the road accepted by mod standards.

[McEnroe]

Thank you very much for the advise and offering help. I'd really appreciate further comments on my progress on this thing.
I think is pretty complex for a level F to come up with. But I never thought of the roads as something a Stormrider decides when he begins riding and consciously tries to achieve. For what I've read people just begins riding for whatever reason they have and as they improve and develop their style discover or create their road by riding it. Therefor the description of the road was more of a description of what I thought might have happened with the riding style I thought for my character, combined with his personality, when he was in level enough to have his own road. Until that I think all riders should be just riders and have riding styles that might evolve into a road.

[White Len]

Well done, you pieced together that argument very nicely. I whole heartedly agree with that. If people can put down Gaia Road and Flame Road without having the mods hounding them I really don't see why you can't get the same approval

[McEnroe]

Thanks. I also added a new roleplay sample, since the original one was lost with half my history when I first posted it, I´like to know if it's good enough, give me a thought.

[White Len]

Average

[penguinism]

Thank you very much for the advise and offering help. I'd really appreciate further comments on my progress on this thing.
I think is pretty complex for a level F to come up with. But I never thought of the roads as something a Stormrider decides when he begins riding and consciously tries to achieve. For what I've read people just begins riding for whatever reason they have and as they improve and develop their style discover or create their road by riding it. Therefor the description of the road was more of a description of what I thought might have happened with the riding style I thought for my character, combined with his personality, when he was in level enough to have his own road. Until that I think all riders should be just riders and have riding styles that might evolve into a road.

no one forces u to choose a road...ur perfectly able to say "Undecided" for road

[McEnroe]

I know, but that's not what I meant.
What I meant is even though I decided what road mi character would ride, as an F class rider he just rides with his own style, which in a future will bring the special abilities of the road. But as an F class rider he just rides, no special abilities.
And I think that's the way it should be.

[McEnroe]

Is a mod ever gonna get in here again?
at least to check it out?

[penguinism]

good question....bump for the rpg mods to check thiiiiiiiiis

[Ayuki]

Well, really, I am not too sure about your road; like you have said McEnroe, the road is just for a person to RIDE on - so what peculiarizes me is that -- does your character have those air-conditioning wheels right now (because to me, it's kind of resembles a regalia)? Or will he attain it once he ranks higher? That's all I want to know since I am fully aware that you have stated that your character is just a martial-artist, speed-going rider thingy person.

[McEnroe]

Yeah, I know the whole thing sounds like a regalia and yeah, it's the result of combining the regalia with this speed-riding matial-arts thingy.

But the character don't need to have it right now, he might get it or get a tuner that makes it for him in a future. I really don't think it's essencial right now, since as a rank F it's not coherent at all for him to have such abilities.

[Ayuki]

Mm'kay, as long as your character doesn't have to air-conditioner wheels until he is like, D or C-class - then it's fine with me.
HOWEVER, ONE THING -->
"V combines speed style riding and martial art movements to alternate rotation fast rotation and sudden counter rotation, thus alternates absorbing the heat, lowering the temperature, and releasing it in strong currents."
^ Does that include the air-conditioned wheels? Or the road itself?

[McEnroe]

Well, he alternates fast rotation, by speed riding, and counter rotation, with kicks and martial-art moves, but he would only produce the air currents if he had the regalia.
If no, the wheels will just move forward and backward with his moves.

[Ayuki]

Okay; so, let me get this straight -- right now, he's just rotating and kicking, right? Without the air-currents?

[McEnroe]

exactly

[Ayuki]

Alright, then - as long as he is only KICKING and ROTATING (without the drop of temperatures and such things of unexperienced F-rankers) until he is of higher rank - I'll accept this application.
APPROVED.